A Resistance Force

Posted: April 12, 2014 by writingsprint in Dubrillion Burning, Science fiction
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Member of the French Forces of the Interior

Member of the French Forces of the Interior

Post #13 of the “Dubrillion Burning” series

Raffa put down his drink. He leaned on the conference table. “So that’s the start. What we need is a way to do enough good to help a civil war.”

Jeana tilted her head just so. “Well, you’re on the right track there.”

“Where?” Risha asked.

“Doing enough good, to help win a war. We’re a group of twenty people, rounded up, if Cartog and his team ever come out of the shadows they’re crawling in. There are tens of thousands of people fighting each other now, who haven’t been able to win the war. Our goal, this group, isn’t to win the war.”

Bowdaar said that they would do their part.

Jeana shook her head. “Not even that. If you want to do your part, you can pick up a rifle and fight on the front line with everyone else.”

“So what is it?” Vette asked.

“Well, we’ve already started. You’ve got Republic senators at least talking about helping. You’re gathering a fleet of spacers who are going to make life miserable for the Loyalist space forces. You’ve even drawn a pair of elite strike teams from the Empire to come help you. You’re creating a resistance force.”

“Shouldn’t we be coordinating with the Rebels?” Vette asked. Raffa pointed to his eyes, to hers, to his, to hers. She beat him to it.

“Ideally, yes. But at this point I wouldn’t expect them to take us with open arms. They don’t know if any of us can fight. We would be lucky to be assigned to raid a supply dump.” She looked at Risha. “Does anyone in the Rebel chain of command trust you, as a leader?”

Risha shook her head. “Only Merritt — count Rinald. And mostly because he loves me. He’s never seen me on a job.”

She looked at Raffa, “And they won’t stomach working with pirates. Law-abiding types never do.“

“I prefer to be called a spacer,” Raffa said, grinning.

“Of course. And how many people call you that?”

His grin became a full smile. “Just other spacers.”

“So we’re a resistance force, until we graduate,” Risha said. “How can we help?”

Jeana sighed. “This is where we could really use Cartog. This is his area of expertise. Resistance forces deal in ambush and sabotage, and intelligence gathering.” She gestured at Raffa and Risha. “You’ve broken into fortresses. You’ve robbed crime lords’ strongholds. You know as well as anyone that a small group can sneak through a large force, and cause havoc once they’re inside.”

“We can work even better if a large force is keeping the bad guys occupied,” Raffa said.

Jeana tapped her head. “Now you’re thinking.”

“I like letting other people do the dying,” he said. Risha punched his shoulder. “Ow.”

“You’re still on the right track. We use our size to our advantage and hit them in their weak spots until they fall.” It was Jeana’s turn to grin. “That’s my area of expertise.”


The good news is I’m having fun with the story. I hope you are too 🙂 . I was afraid the discussion about what they’re going to do and how they were going to do it would be dry, but so far I think it reads well.

I’m a little bummed that the conversation’s being dominated by Risha, Raffa and Jeana. Poor Bowdaar and Vette don’t have much to say. Yes, they’re minor characters, but they’re also minor characters, and need to participate in the scene. Otherwise, they’re dead weight. I was in a writing class once where the instructor said to keep the number of characters to a minimum because too many would be distracting. If they were extras in a movie, you would have to pay them just to be scenery. If they talk, you have to pay them more, so make sure what they say is worth it. In a rewrite I’ll either give them more to say, have them stand guard outside, or just let them hang out with each other and talk about sports or something.

Tomorrow I need to get back to “Don’t Mess with the Dreamcatchers” and wrap that one up. Sometimes I get torn over moving forward with this or writing a new, standalone piece for variety. Let me know if you have any preference 🙂 .

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  1. A.D. Everard says:

    I know I’m generally late on the scene, but I don’t mind what you write, I’m following the stories. 🙂

    Re your minor characters, if they are drawn forward, let them come. If they play a role later, it’s a good thing to let their voice be heard and get the readers to meet them. People care about characters they’ve met and know. Even minor characters are there for a reason. That’s my view, anyway.

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    • I agree. Vette and Bowdaar came along because they’re the main characters’ backups in a dangerous port, so that made sense. Now that they’re in a safe place, they have less of a role. I’ll let it go and have them talk as it makes sense. Sometimes you just listen in a meeting like this.

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      • A.D. Everard says:

        Yes, I agree. Not everyone has something vital to say every time. That they are present and taking it all in can be shown with a nod or a glance between them – a reader is still meeting them even if they are not talking or doing anything. Or they’re off doing their own brand of important stuff. It all works.

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