Voice Week 2013: Racing

Posted: November 8, 2013 by writingsprint in Drama
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And there’s the finish line. Let’s kick it in and put this one in the history books. How much did we raise today? I think it was ten thousand dollars, total? That would pay for some of Brenda’s treatments and her medicine. I can’t believe how expensive it is.

One step closer. All of us, taking one step closer to a cure. That’s what it’s all about.

Next week I have to drive Brenda to the doctor for her last round of chemo. I hope this is the last one. Please, God, let it be the last one. It will be.

This post was brought to you by the prompt “racing” from Voice Week 2013 at Be Kind Rewrite.

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  1. […] Read the rest at Voice Week 2013: Racing | The Daily 400. […]

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  2. Oh, wow. Again, completely different. I love how you keep shifting the focus every day.

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    • writingsprint says:

      Thanks! I got swamped with work the other day and didn’t have time for a fifth voice. If I come up with one I’ll send it along :).

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  3. Such a unique voice — sorrowful and raw. It creates a strong contrast to your previous stories. Nicely written. 🙂

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    • writingsprint says:

      Thank you! I’ve volunteered at a few marathons — never run in one — but it’s always stuck in my head, what it must be like for the people who are running for someone else.

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  4. yikici says:

    I love the focused urgency of this voice, the hope he (I think he’s a he lol), and such an endearing quality to the story, it certainly hits home, excellent job. 🙂

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    • writingsprint says:

      Thanks! This voice meant the most to me, because the race meant the most to this character. It’s a he :), but I admit I bounced back and forth as I wrote it. I kept asking myself, which one sounds better? Which one has more focus or more emotion?

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  5. evan72 says:

    One of the most fulfilling voices I’ve met all week. At the heart of the bitterest conflict, there are those who still hope for good 😉

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    • writingsprint says:

      😀 thank you so much! This is a direction I wish I’d started with — people run for reasons other than racing. In fact, unless you’re a competitor down to the bones, or just love running, it’s probably the least reason.

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      • evan72 says:

        Honestly I think it was best that you ended with this. It gave a good, lasting impression which later on will carry through in viewers’ minds to the rest of the series. You’ve done well!

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  6. elmowrites says:

    A personal motive this time – I’m left wondering if he raised the money for charity or for Brenda specificly, though.

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  7. jenniesisler says:

    The last sentence shows this character’s faith and determination to help and is my favorite part of this piece. Painful yet determined hope…this reminds me of why I walk every year to raise funds for cystic fibrosis research.

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    • writingsprint says:

      Thank you for your message :). I’ve volunteered at some races and walk-a-thons, and every time I was overwhelmed by the sense of community and dedication to their loved ones in the participants.

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